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Yeah, I think this is alright. Intermediate approved for 2/2.
[Mr. Turtle] Wartortle
Ability: Torrent
Signature Move: AAAACHOO!
Flavor: Mr. Turtle suffers from a variety of allergies. His Trainer often drops several weeks’ allowance on medication just to keep his starter’s affliction under control. However, both of them noticed some interesting reactions whenever his Trainer forgot to give him his pills; his opponents’ (and the referee’s) faces would scrunch up in fear whenever the Water type sneezed. He expelled a weird, viscous, cyan mass that… moved? Oh God, is it moving?!?!
Thinking like a true Asberian (weaponize everything! structural stability is for the weak!), Mr. Turtle’s Trainer immediately set out on capitalizing on this bodily excretion.
AAAACHOO! can be triggered by the usual array of things (pollen, dust, etc.) just as it can be controlled. In fact, the moment Mr. Turtle gets a whiff of any of these agents, he’ll drop everything and sneeze at his target stronger than usual. However, Mr. Turtle’s Trainer dispenses an allergy pill the first time this happens, assuring the situation never occurs again.
Type: Water/ Class: Special / Power: 60 (90 in special case) / Energy: 4% (7% in special case) / Accuracy: 100 / Target: Single / Priority: – (+1 in special case) / Usage Gap: Once every three rounds (once every four if special case occurs).
Effects: Once the mucus comes in contact with the enemy, they are immediately slowed down (-1 Speed). The secretion is thick and gooey enough to stay on the enemy even if high-pressure water is sprayed on it. The mucus dries out at the end of the third round, removing the Speed debuff.
The move can be triggered by any of these moves once:
-Sandstorm (and any Abilities that create a sandstorm)
-Sand Attack
-Sand Tomb
-Sweet Scent
-Sleep Powder
-Poison Powder
-Stun Spore
-Cotton Spore
-Spore
-Anything the ref deems eligible (within reason; it can both be moves such as Hurricane carrying insane amounts of dust or the arena itself that cause the sneeze)
When triggered by one of the aforementioned moves, Mr. Turtle randomly forfeits one of his actions in the following round in favor of a stronger AAAACHOO! (90BP/7%/+1 Priority instead of 60 BP/4%/0 Priority). As mentioned earlier, this stronger move can only happen once.
For example, after a Combee uses Sweet Scent, the command string Withdraw~Water Gun~Tackle can end up like this:
AAAACHOO!~Water Gun~Tackle
Withdraw~AAAACHOO!~Tackle
Withdraw~Water Gun~AAAACHOO!
Description: When Mr. Turtle is commanded to use the move (instead of it being triggered), he’ll take a whiff of his surrounding and sneeze out a thick, viscous cyan blob that will stick to the opponent. It’s nasty, gooey, and cold to the touch.
If the special case occurs, Mr. Turtle will stumble around looking like he’s about to sneeze in the round before, and will sneeze with the power of a thousand hurricanes when he actually does. The same glob is sneezed, but at a much higher velocity. Then, I liek Squirtles/Scythers/S Pokemon of the Month takes out a Claritin and gives it to Mr. Turtle, preventing th.
In both cases, the mucus dries out into a kind of crust, and tiny flakes are easily peeled off (y’know, like how boogers usually do when they’re inside your nose).
I think the standard procedure is to re-submit signature stuff if you want to upgrade it upon evolution, so my comments will disregard the parts about what will happen when he evolves (though after a quick glance, I don't think some of the evolved changes, especially some of the more powerful added moves, are going to fly.) Anyway, I think the moves Prickles loses now are mostly on par with the ones he gains, and though I'm a little leery of approving the addition of Inferno I think it's balanced out enough by the losses of Natural Gift and Payback. Unless another approver really disagrees, I'm going to Junior approve this for 1/2 (though keep in mind either JackPK or Byrus will need to look it over next for full approval.)
Cacnea | Male |Sand VeilIlluminate | 0 Exp
Signature Attribute: Jack-o-Lantern
Flavour:
There once was a man who had a love of fire, a burning passion that made him ire.
But a man like he, he bore no shame. He declared he was a botanist to astonishing acclaim.
A friend to fire and a friend to grass, he declared from the rooftops during Sunday’s mass.
He then fell from the sky and broke his back, leaving him in pain inside his worn old shack.
Not one soul had ever put trust in him, only stealing his life whim by whim.
Soon he bore dire anger for fellow man, and he formulated a very passionate plan.
He would find all the plants, protect them he would.
Then set fire to the humans, let them burn as they should.
He walked into the blaze a happy soul, laughing and cheering through his final toll.
He did not walk out, to the plants’ dismay. He died that day, he died that day.
~
The eternal sandstorm encompassing Sinnoh’s Route 228 is not a very natural phenomenon, breaking the mildly cold climate of the region. This is not because of a sudden change in regional weather, but events of a more spiritual nature.
Before Sinnoh had been completely overcome by modern tides, a small village had stood inside the sea-worn valley of Route 228, a town very similar to Celestic in the mainland. In the town was said to be a very joyous, patient and passionate man: old man Kelvin. He was spontaneous for his age, dancing and prancing about, proclaiming to the heavens his love for his greenhouse and his love for the sun. But a freak accident left him in great pain and forced the populace into a slow and steady show of inconsideration to him.
Being the passionate man he was, he never forgave them for forgetting him. Reports state he burned the town to the ground, then walked into the inferno himself, waving cheerily to his greenhouse, the only building left untouched by his blaze.
Hikers and trainers passing through the Route 228 sandstorm at night occasionally reported sightings of a will-o-wisp like figure floating amongst the sands, eternally searching, but always staying far from the humans. Time had bent his will and twisted his ambitions.
Old man Kelvin’s spirit searched for a vessel, a shelter from the curse of the sandstorm he brought, the sand would forever douse his fires and leave him in eternal pain. He had watched his garden plummet to the vicious sand, and the grit tore anger into him. He would search for a rough, harsh and powerful grass type to shelter his flame. The Cacturne and Cacnea were the only ones that had prevailed in the sandstorm he brought, and he feared leaving the site of the blaze as he may spread the accursed sand wherever he went. The Cacturne always sensed when he was close, and banished him far away from them with malevolent energies, in turn protecting their children furiously.
One fateful night, he came upon a bright orange sphere nestled in the sand, lying still and asleep like a child. His heart welled with fire; there were no Cacturne in sight, and this beautiful orange Cacnea lay unaware. He delved his spirit of fire through the pores in the sand dwellers skin. He had seen pumpkins akin to the baby; the children from the village had loved the jack-o-lanterns he carved.
He was reborn that day.
With time, the infant grew with the spirit inside him. When his parents had realized what was held inside him, they fled in shame and fear. Prickles was left with only the burning spirit of old man Kelvin to nurture him. With time, his mouth grew into a malevolent smile to let the flame within him breathe, his flower wilted and out sprouted a knotted stem. He felt himself get larger, more bright and more, more fiery with every breath he took, slowly shedding his former self to be reborn anew.
Effect: Prickles is considered to be a Grass/Fire type on all occasions (weather, STAB, W/R, etc.), on evolution to Cacturne his secondary type will be Fire and not Dark (he will still be a Grass/Fire type).
Prickles’ shines a fiery light from within himself, shunning the darkness around him and embracing the flame. He loses and gains the following moves:
-Faint Attack, Payback, Switcheroo, Fling, Dark Pulse, Sandstorm
+Flame Wheel, Flame Charge, Inferno, Will-o-wisp, Fire Punch, Flame Burst
On evolution, the glands in his body that produce deadly poison (along with major healing glands) will be unable to do so. The spirit of old man Kelvin influence overcoming them, bestowing upon him his eternal curse, giving him more as a gift for nurturing the old flame:
-Belch, Venoshock, Acid, Poison Sting, Poison Jab, Smellingsalt, Synthesis, Pin Missile, Embargo, Fell Stinger, Pin Missile, Spikes
+Sunny Day, Blaze Kick, Flamethrower, Fire Blast, Hex, Fiery Dance, Mystical Fire
Due to the unnatural energy residing within him, he cannot use Natural Gift, Secret Power or Hidden Power.
When wandering the desert on Route 228, attempting to find prey, Prickles realized that he illuminated the area around him, allowing him to be seen even under the harsh cloak of the sand (Prickles’ ability is now Illuminate instead of Sand Veil, he is no longer immune to Sandstorm’s damage).
Yeah, this looks fine to me! (It's clear that you mean at least 15% more health, not exactly 15%, but I think this should be clarified anyway. In addition, what you currently have in "Usage Gap" should be moved to "Effects", and you also need to add an actual Usage Gap. I think this move has enough drawbacks that it can be something short, though, around 3-6 actions.) Intermediate approving for 1/2 once you've made these changes.
Hmm, I still don't think this is okay. It's way too powerful right now, especially since Kazza isn't fully evolved yet, since Gravitational Tear will usually be doing upwards of 20% damage, which is much too high for the effective 8% energy cost. I think you should aim for something like 7% damage and energy drain for 9% energy, or 10% damage/energy drain for 12%+ energy if you still want to have both effects; you could also adjust either damage or energy-damage accordingly with the energy, aim for a middle ground, or change the effects to something more in line with Superbird's suggestion (damage or energy drain only, with or without a secondary effect.) But for now, I'm going to say this isn't approved.
[Moominpapa Vodkazot Jr.] Unown (x) <Levitate>
Hey guys, I'm just going to throw this old thing out there. It was approved in the old league, but I made a few move modifications a while ago.
Cacnea | Male |Sand VeilIlluminate | 0 Exp
Signature Attribute: Jack-o-Lantern
Flavour:
There once was a man who had a love of fire, a burning passion that made him ire.
But a man like he, he bore no shame. He declared he was a botanist to astonishing acclaim.
A friend to fire and a friend to grass, he declared from the rooftops during Sunday’s mass.
He then fell from the sky and broke his back, leaving him in pain inside his worn old shack.
Not one soul had ever put trust in him, only stealing his life whim by whim.
Soon he bore dire anger for fellow man, and he formulated a very passionate plan.
He would find all the plants, protect them he would.
Then set fire to the humans, let them burn as they should.
He walked into the blaze a happy soul, laughing and cheering through his final toll.
He did not walk out, to the plants’ dismay. He died that day, he died that day.
~
The eternal sandstorm encompassing Sinnoh’s Route 228 is not a very natural phenomenon, breaking the mildly cold climate of the region. This is not because of a sudden change in regional weather, but events of a more spiritual nature.
Before Sinnoh had been completely overcome by modern tides, a small village had stood inside the sea-worn valley of Route 228, a town very similar to Celestic in the mainland. In the town was said to be a very joyous, patient and passionate man: old man Kelvin. He was spontaneous for his age, dancing and prancing about, proclaiming to the heavens his love for his greenhouse and his love for the sun. But a freak accident left him in great pain and forced the populace into a slow and steady show of inconsideration to him.
Being the passionate man he was, he never forgave them for forgetting him. Reports state he burned the town to the ground, then walked into the inferno himself, waving cheerily to his greenhouse, the only building left untouched by his blaze.
Hikers and trainers passing through the Route 228 sandstorm at night occasionally reported sightings of a will-o-wisp like figure floating amongst the sands, eternally searching, but always staying far from the humans. Time had bent his will and twisted his ambitions.
Old man Kelvin’s spirit searched for a vessel, a shelter from the curse of the sandstorm he brought, the sand would forever douse his fires and leave him in eternal pain. He had watched his garden plummet to the vicious sand, and the grit tore anger into him. He would search for a rough, harsh and powerful grass type to shelter his flame. The Cacturne and Cacnea were the only ones that had prevailed in the sandstorm he brought, and he feared leaving the site of the blaze as he may spread the accursed sand wherever he went. The Cacturne always sensed when he was close, and banished him far away from them with malevolent energies, in turn protecting their children furiously.
One fateful night, he came upon a bright orange sphere nestled in the sand, lying still and asleep like a child. His heart welled with fire; there were no Cacturne in sight, and this beautiful orange Cacnea lay unaware. He delved his spirit of fire through the pores in the sand dwellers skin. He had seen pumpkins akin to the baby; the children from the village had loved the jack-o-lanterns he carved.
He was reborn that day.
With time, the infant grew with the spirit inside him. When his parents had realized what was held inside him, they fled in shame and fear. Prickles was left with only the burning spirit of old man Kelvin to nurture him. With time, his mouth grew into a malevolent smile to let the flame within him breathe, his flower wilted and out sprouted a knotted stem. He felt himself get larger, more bright and more, more fiery with every breath he took, slowly shedding his former self to be reborn anew.
Effect: Prickles is considered to be a Grass/Fire type on all occasions (weather, STAB, W/R, etc.), on evolution to Cacturne his secondary type will be Fire and not Dark (he will still be a Grass/Fire type).
Prickles’ shines a fiery light from within himself, shunning the darkness around him and embracing the flame. He loses and gains the following moves:
-Faint Attack, Payback, Switcheroo, Fling, Dark Pulse, Sandstorm
+Flame Wheel, Flame Charge, Inferno, Will-o-wisp, Fire Punch, Flame Burst
On evolution, the glands in his body that produce deadly poison (along with major healing glands) will be unable to do so. The spirit of old man Kelvin influence overcoming them, bestowing upon him his eternal curse, giving him more as a gift for nurturing the old flame:
-Belch, Venoshock, Acid, Poison Sting, Poison Jab, Smellingsalt, Synthesis, Pin Missile, Embargo, Fell Stinger, Pin Missile, Spikes
+Sunny Day, Blaze Kick, Flamethrower, Fire Blast, Hex, Fiery Dance, Mystical Fire
Due to the unnatural energy residing within him, he cannot use Natural Gift, Secret Power or Hidden Power.
When wandering the desert on Route 228, attempting to find prey, Prickles realized that he illuminated the area around him, allowing him to be seen even under the harsh cloak of the sand (Prickles’ ability is now Illuminate instead of Sand Veil, he is no longer immune to Sandstorm’s damage).
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I could write up a description, but would the sprite be enough? :D
Signature Attribute: Evident Power
Effects: Float's Hidden Power has 8% base power and costs 5% base energy, but it will always move last in its priority bracket when using Hidden Power.
Description: As a leader of its Unown tribe before being captured by the ASB league, Float is practiced in the use of its only attack for ritual purposes, and is able to channel much more energy into the Hidden Power technique than Unown normally can. However, a more powerful attack takes more time to prepare and the arch-sages were noncombatants, not obligated or acclimated to defending the ruins from intruders; thus, Float will always move after other Pokemon if they use moves of similar execution speed.
Flavor: "The social structure of Unown tribes has been found by many researchers (Anson et al., 2009; Edwards and Wilhop, 2012) to feature a clear hierarchy, with Unown that have not yet received training on how to control their abilities at the bottom of the metaphorical ladder. Next are the 'worker' Unown who gather resources and defend the tribe's territory, on par with those 'sage' Unown who have grown too old or frail for battle but can still impart their wisdom and experience to the lower classes. The highest social class, the nearest equivalent to leaders in other Pokemon groups, is comprised of what have been dubbed 'arch-sage' Unown and has ultimate say in group decisions.
It has recently become apparent that these Unown, besides being integral parts of the leadership structure, also supervise the performance of the burial ritual in which Hidden Power is used to seal the bodies of deceased Unown into the wall-carvings common in areas where Unown tribes live. Because this ritual is so important to Unown society, it stands to reason that these Unown do not fight on behalf of the tribe as worker-class Unown do and are often found weaker in standard combat as a result. This weakness is often to the dismay of trainers who attempt to raise members of this class for battle: a recent seizure of Unown from an Asber trainer's house has led to a surplus of Unown in the ASB league's stock, many of whom have been identified as members of the arch-sage class, but it is unclear how many will be bought following the initial purchase of one of the rare exclamation-point variants, also an arch-sage, by trainer 'Keldeo' […]" (excerpt from "Unraveling the Unown" by M. Poe and V. Keemon, published in vol. 7, issue 2 of the Asber Gazette)
To continue the trend of giving "bad" Pokemon signature attributes, here's one I've been sitting on for my Unown. I think it balances out all right, but I'm definitely willing to tone the upgrades down or add more drawbacks if you guys aren't okay with what I have here.
Signature Attribute: Evident Power
Effects: Float's Hidden Power has 8% base power and costs 5% base energy, but it will always move last in its priority bracket when using Hidden Power.
Description: As a leader of its Unown tribe before being captured by the ASB league, Float is practiced in the use of its only attack for ritual purposes, and is able to channel much more energy into the Hidden Power technique than Unown normally can. However, a more powerful attack takes more time to prepare and the arch-sages were noncombatants, not obligated or acclimated to defending the ruins from intruders; thus, Float will always move after other Pokemon if they use moves of similar execution speed.
Flavor: "The social structure of Unown tribes has been found by many researchers (Anson et al., 2009; Edwards and Wilhop, 2012) to feature a clear hierarchy, with Unown that have not yet received training on how to control their abilities at the bottom of the metaphorical ladder. Next are the 'worker' Unown who gather resources and defend the tribe's territory, on par with those 'sage' Unown who have grown too old or frail for battle but can still impart their wisdom and experience to the lower classes. The highest social class, the nearest equivalent to leaders in other Pokemon groups, is comprised of what have been dubbed 'arch-sage' Unown and has ultimate say in group decisions.
It has recently become apparent that these Unown, besides being integral parts of the leadership structure, also supervise the performance of the burial ritual in which Hidden Power is used to seal the bodies of deceased Unown into the wall-carvings common in areas where Unown tribes live. Because this ritual is so important to Unown society, it stands to reason that these Unown do not fight on behalf of the tribe as worker-class Unown do and are often found weaker in standard combat as a result. This weakness is often to the dismay of trainers who attempt to raise members of this class for battle: a recent seizure of Unown from an Asber trainer's house has led to a surplus of Unown in the ASB league's stock, many of whom have been identified as members of the arch-sage class, but it is unclear how many will be bought following the initial purchase of one of the rare exclamation-point variants, also an arch-sage, by trainer 'Keldeo' […]" (excerpt from "Unraveling the Unown" by M. Poe and V. Keemon, published in vol. 7, issue 2 of the Asber Gazette)
Honestly, I'm not so sure about Odor Sleuth being a good drawback to this. It (1) resets evasion to normal, (2) makes Ghosts vulnerable to Normal and Fighting, and (3) prevents sneaky moves like Feint Attack. Evasion is honestly not changed much in ASB, so (1) is rarely going to come into play; Raticate is not a Ghost-type, so (2) won't have any effect; and judging by a (very quick) glance, the only move Raticate gets that falls under (3) is Double Team, which is admittedly a highly effective nerf, but it seems like if that's what you intended, you could have just said "his stench reveals him as the true Nurglitch, making him unable to effectively use Double Team."
Clarify that by 10% you mean an additional one-tenth of the final damage, not the ASB usage of "10%" that is a synonym of "100 base power."
Now this, unlike the Fairy-type Luvdisc, involves a lot of movepool changes and is being applied to a fairly able Pokemon (that can still evolve, at that!).
[Priscilla] Minccino ♀
Ability: Technician
Signature Attribute: Crossbreed
Description: Somewhere generations back in Priscilla's bloodline, despite taboo and the usual logistics of Pokémon breeding, her ancestors somehow crossbred with Dragon-type Pokémon. The genes remained dormant at first, such that this abomination went unnoticed for a long while until finally Priscilla was born. The latent dragon genes finally awoke, and she was born unlike any of her predecessors, freakishly exaggerated in size and bestowed with elemental properties and abilities like none of her kind. She was duly shunned by her relatives and cast out, regarded as a freak and an abomination by all who came upon her. Despite being captured by the Asber league and finally accepted by her trainer, the emotional scars of this persecution have yet to fade.
Effects: Priscilla is granted the Dragon type, thus changing her typing to Normal/Dragon. Her height and weight are both double that of the rest of her kind. Being considered a freak and an abomination for her entire life has made Priiscilla cold, aloof and highly suspicious of any form of praise or friendly gesture, as well as unable to empathise with or pity opponents. Thus the moves After You, Attract, Baby-Doll Eyes, Captivate, Charm, Encore, Flatter, Helping Hand, Hold Hands, and Play Nice have no effect on her, though nor is she able to use any of those same moves herself. Taunt and Torment remain in effect on her for one action longer than normal.
Movepool changes:
+ Dragon Dance, Dragon Pulse, Dragon Rush, Dragon Tail, Outrage
- After You, Attract, Baby-Doll Eyes, Captivate, Charm, Encore, Helping Hand, Hyper Voice, Uproar, Work Up
I think you've got a bit too much in the way of benefits and not quite enough drawbacks to make up for it.
[Logan] Abra ♂
Ability: Inner Focus
Signature Attribute: Big Hat
Description: Logan is an introverted sort, much preferring to lose himself in thought than pay attention to others around him. Unfortunately, this led to him being considered something of an oddball, his presence often drawing the unwanted attention of staring eyes. Try as he might, he found it impossible to concentrate with so much ogling going on. Fortunately, his trainer found a solution; an enormous brown wizard's hat, with a brim several times as wide as the peak is tall, more than wide enough to block his ears and completely obscure his face. With it on, no amount of staring, noise, or snide gossiping could distract him! However, needless to say having a huge, heavy hat weighing him down and blocking his view is not without drawbacks.
Effects: Logan's concentration is increased immensely, reducing the duration of Taunt or Torment by one action, causing him to recover from confusion and attraction twice as quickly, (i.e. 10% fail chance reduction per action he passes a check), and increasing the final damage of all his special attacks by 2%. His eyes are also completely covered by the brim of the hat, meaning no moves requiring eye contact can effect him (or be used by him, for that matter), unless the foe using them is close up enough to peer under the brim. However, this also means the base accuracy of all his moves is decreased by 10% due to the difficulty of seeing his target, and the weight of the titanic piece of headgear reduces his base speed by a third.
Ha ha, I actually really love the idea of this. I'm not sure how fair it would be, for instance, against really complicated stuff like The Omskivar's proposed Cascoon (or even simple retypes like Eifie's Water/Fairy Luvdisc), so I'm only tentatively approving it and encouraging other approvers to join the conversation on this rather than just rubber-stamping it, but I do really really love the idea behind this. In any case, whether immediately approved or sent back to the drawing board, I encourage you to rephrase it so attributes are out of play all the time that Łebsko is in play, so as to avoid potentially ambiguous/contradictory circumstances in 2v2s and things like that.
