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Well, I know Mars has a Purugly, but the question here is how Skye knew, when she had no prior information about the Team Galactic admins.
Again, this is information that should be in the story. The reader has no reason to assume psychics can remotely operate computers (watch out for that; one of the major problems with writing psychic characters is the danger of making them too omnipotent and having a hard time actually getting them into honest-to-God trouble without conveniently forgetting about some of the things they can do) or that she extracted information from Brendan's brain. If this is how she found out this stuff, have her actually tell him about it. For instance...
Honestly, though, she's a murder suspect. There is no way the local police department has any authority to give her this kind of leeway; they're blatantly endangering the citizens they're supposed to be protecting by setting a potential killer loose, for eff's sake. It doesn't matter that they like her and she used to be on the force. If I were the chief of police I'd fire everyone involved and have her transferred somewhere else if I heard about this. :/ Is there any particular reason not to just say they have, say, Dark-type guard Pokémon that use Mean Look and can't be affected by psychic powers? Is it actually important to the story that she can teleport freely out of her cell if she chooses to? If it isn't, I strongly recommend you scrap that part because it's just so wildly implausible.
Constructive criticism: look it up. I'd personally much, much rather have comments picking apart the logic of my work, if it's faulty, than empty, meaningless, generic praise like "This is pretty good. Keep up the great work!" or "AWESOME!" (guess whose posts I grabbed those quotes from). Please never read my work if this is how you would respond to people giving critical reviews.
