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Old 07-01-2008, 04:52 PM
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If you're too lazy to look for the little red lines in Firefox, put in into word processor of your choice and read the window that pops up.

There is a need to get annoyed when you claim to not have any difficulty spelling but can't be bothered spending a few minutes proof-reading (and, if you're writing it in Firefox for some reason, spellchecking). :|
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Ah, I see this has come back. I'm still waiting for the exciting next event. (Presumably)

As for critique, I do agree that it is a bit... similar to normal game adventures. I'm thinking, though, that somewhere along the line something very different id going to happen, and that will redeem the one called Castform. Until then, I'm here, lying in wait.

I say that it will have to do with Cal later on.
Hmm? Maybe. Or maybe something completely unexpected!
Or maybe not.
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right. Now we leave and await a response like anybody else.
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Old 07-02-2008, 05:50 AM
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^Indeed, something different will happen. You'll just have to wait and see. Or read. Or whatever.

And CNiall, if you read further you'll notice the most recent chapters have no spelling mistakes; I've written them in Word beforehand and F7'ed it all... and from now on I will always do so, and I'm sorry if my typos have caused you any offence.
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Old 07-02-2008, 03:43 PM
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Less recent chapters are still chapters; they haven't caused offence, but they're certainly irritating when you have the resources to quickly eliminate them. :|
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astronomy is completely different from astrology please don't confuse them;
cosmology is different from both astronomy and astrology so don't confuse that either;
the LHC is not a 'black hole machine', 'atom smasher' or any variation thereof;
Antonín Dvořák was a romantic period composer famous for composing the New World Symphony and his surname is pronounced DVOR-zhahk; August Dvorak was an American psychologist who co-created the Dvorak Simplified Keyboard and his surname is pronounced DVOR-ak;
& is called an ampersand, not an 'and sign' or anything;
do not confuse the ampersand with the treble clef;
it's etc., not ect.;
I won't even bother outlining proper apostrophe usage;
it should not be octopi but rather octopuses or octopodes if you feel particularly pedantic: octopus is not a second declension Latin noun and thus does not decline to octopi;
whom is used when it is the object of a pronoun or with the indirect object;
oddly enough, if you sprinkle pi around with some numbers and symbols it doesn't actually look mathematical or clever;
the suffix is -ful, not -full: powerful, painful, joyful.
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Old 07-02-2008, 03:47 PM
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I... never said they weren't chapters?

Yes, I am an irritating, potentially lazy person who writes terrible fanfics and is stupid. Are you happy now?
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Old 07-02-2008, 03:59 PM
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Yes, I am an irritating, potentially lazy person who writes terrible fanfics and is stupid. Are you happy now?
...no?

If the most recent chapters have no typos, why do the earlier ones? You seem to have convinced yourself that I dislike you in particular. I may be a pretty harsh critic (especially over typos which can be avoided), but it's nothing to do with you in particular. Christ, everyone seems to think that I'm out to get them recently. o.o
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cosmology is different from both astronomy and astrology so don't confuse that either;
the LHC is not a 'black hole machine', 'atom smasher' or any variation thereof;
Antonín Dvořák was a romantic period composer famous for composing the New World Symphony and his surname is pronounced DVOR-zhahk; August Dvorak was an American psychologist who co-created the Dvorak Simplified Keyboard and his surname is pronounced DVOR-ak;
& is called an ampersand, not an 'and sign' or anything;
do not confuse the ampersand with the treble clef;
it's etc., not ect.;
I won't even bother outlining proper apostrophe usage;
it should not be octopi but rather octopuses or octopodes if you feel particularly pedantic: octopus is not a second declension Latin noun and thus does not decline to octopi;
whom is used when it is the object of a pronoun or with the indirect object;
oddly enough, if you sprinkle pi around with some numbers and symbols it doesn't actually look mathematical or clever;
the suffix is -ful, not -full: powerful, painful, joyful.
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Old 07-04-2008, 08:36 PM
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Hmm.

I'm considering completely rewriting the whole thing to make it longer, better and generally more enjoyable. What do you guys think?
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There's no way you could get worse.
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Ah, the dreaded feeling that you have to re-write everything DX

Well, in all honesty, it's all up to you. Do you think re-writing it will make the story better, or let you add in things you didn't before? If yes, then why not?

But, are you just re-writing because someone doesn't like you're story (which, I only think they're just pointing out stuff is wrong). If so, then I don't think so.

All and all, if it serves the story, the yes, by all means.
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Old 07-08-2008, 09:26 AM
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No, really. If you did, you could just switch back.
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Old 07-10-2008, 06:16 AM
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Sorry? I don't quite understand what you mean by that.
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Old 07-10-2008, 09:30 AM
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I think that they were trying to make a joke and are trying to say that if you change it for the worse (why you'd do that I have no idea) you can revert it to how it was before.
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cosmology is different from both astronomy and astrology so don't confuse that either;
the LHC is not a 'black hole machine', 'atom smasher' or any variation thereof;
Antonín Dvořák was a romantic period composer famous for composing the New World Symphony and his surname is pronounced DVOR-zhahk; August Dvorak was an American psychologist who co-created the Dvorak Simplified Keyboard and his surname is pronounced DVOR-ak;
& is called an ampersand, not an 'and sign' or anything;
do not confuse the ampersand with the treble clef;
it's etc., not ect.;
I won't even bother outlining proper apostrophe usage;
it should not be octopi but rather octopuses or octopodes if you feel particularly pedantic: octopus is not a second declension Latin noun and thus does not decline to octopi;
whom is used when it is the object of a pronoun or with the indirect object;
oddly enough, if you sprinkle pi around with some numbers and symbols it doesn't actually look mathematical or clever;
the suffix is -ful, not -full: powerful, painful, joyful.
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I'm only one person.
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I'm assuming CNiall used 'they' in the context of referring to just one person whose gender is unknown to the user.
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I'm assuming CNiall used 'they' in the context of referring to just one person whose gender is unknown to the user.
This. I always manage to refer to people as the wrong gender if it's not explicitly stated, and 'they' sounds much more polite than 'it'. Then again, I can refer to it as it if it would prefer that.
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astronomy is completely different from astrology please don't confuse them;
cosmology is different from both astronomy and astrology so don't confuse that either;
the LHC is not a 'black hole machine', 'atom smasher' or any variation thereof;
Antonín Dvořák was a romantic period composer famous for composing the New World Symphony and his surname is pronounced DVOR-zhahk; August Dvorak was an American psychologist who co-created the Dvorak Simplified Keyboard and his surname is pronounced DVOR-ak;
& is called an ampersand, not an 'and sign' or anything;
do not confuse the ampersand with the treble clef;
it's etc., not ect.;
I won't even bother outlining proper apostrophe usage;
it should not be octopi but rather octopuses or octopodes if you feel particularly pedantic: octopus is not a second declension Latin noun and thus does not decline to octopi;
whom is used when it is the object of a pronoun or with the indirect object;
oddly enough, if you sprinkle pi around with some numbers and symbols it doesn't actually look mathematical or clever;
the suffix is -ful, not -full: powerful, painful, joyful.
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