The Cave of Dragonflies forums

Go Back   The Cave of Dragonflies forums > Creativity > Writing

Notices

Reply
 
Thread Tools
  #21  
Old 05-13-2010, 04:13 PM
hopeandjoy's Avatar
hopeandjoy hopeandjoy is offline
yan ya yan ya yaa iii yaaa
 
Join Date: June 26, 2008
Location: Offer void in Nebraska
Age: 23
Posts: 2,449
Pronoun: She
hopeandjoy is an unknown quantity at this point
Send a message via Skype™ to hopeandjoy
Default Re: Pokemon Brass and Bronze

I can't say I've ever heard of someone not using Word or OpenOffice first. Couldn't you at least write on paper?

Also, these people are great writers with great advice. Why won't you listen to them?

Also, to add to this...

Why are Satoshi-tachi (Ash & co) getting starters? They aren't new trainers.
Why is Kasumi (Misty) here? Why not Hikari (Dawn) or someone new?
Why are you relying on pictures? You're a writer; words should paint your pictures.
You said that it was pretty in Rose Town. Why is that, other than the flowers? Is there a beautiful smell? Is it a warm clear day? How are the residents happy?
Why is there a city called New Pewter City? Did the one in Kanto burn to the ground?

The Edit button is right there, waiting.
Reply With Quote
  #22  
Old 05-25-2010, 07:56 AM
Severus Snape's Avatar
Severus Snape Severus Snape is offline
"Detention, Potter,"
 
Join Date: April 19, 2010
Location: With Metagross in Grass
Age: 19
Posts: 224
Pronoun: Male
Severus Snape is an unknown quantity at this point
Default Re: Pokemon Brass and Bronze

Words painting... I've heard that somewhere before... thanks for reminding.

Ash is just testing the new region's Pokemon.

Word, yeah, once in a while. OpenOffice isn't so good.

New Pewter City, Forrest is the gym leader and he misses the Kanto Pewter.
__________________
Severus Snape
Reply With Quote
  #23  
Old 05-26-2010, 01:39 AM
Flora's Avatar
Flora Flora is offline
Captain Husbando
 
Join Date: June 25, 2008
Location: Cornfields, PA
Age: 25
Posts: 5,849
Pronoun: they
Flora is on a distinguished road
Default Re: Pokemon Brass and Bronze

Quote:
Originally Posted by Grass Pokemon Master View Post
New Pewter City, Forrest is the gym leader and he misses the Kanto Pewter.
First of all, why the heck isn't Forrest running the actual Pewter gym? Isn't he supposed to be doing that since Brock is adventuring with Ash/womanizing.

like everyone else said, waaaaaaaaay more description. and when people ask for clarification, don't just tell them, write it into the story.
__________________
Everyday I'm tumblin'
Eifie is somehow at fault for the usertitle (hint: my boyfriend is Captain Waifu)
Reply With Quote
  #24  
Old 05-26-2010, 02:40 AM
Sandstone-Shadow's Avatar
Sandstone-Shadow Sandstone-Shadow is offline
A chickadee in love with the sky
 
Join Date: August 4, 2008
Location: In between
Posts: 1,256
Pronoun: she
Sandstone-Shadow is an unknown quantity at this point
Default Re: Pokemon Brass and Bronze

Quote:
Originally Posted by Flora and Ashes View Post
and when people ask for clarification, don't just tell them, write it into the story.
I'd say this is a golden rule for any kind of writing on a forum or otherwise. Flora and Ashes summed it up perfectly.
Reply With Quote
  #25  
Old 05-26-2010, 02:51 AM
Severus Snape's Avatar
Severus Snape Severus Snape is offline
"Detention, Potter,"
 
Join Date: April 19, 2010
Location: With Metagross in Grass
Age: 19
Posts: 224
Pronoun: Male
Severus Snape is an unknown quantity at this point
Default Re: Pokemon Brass and Bronze

right. all in the next chapter. much more will be revealed.
__________________
Severus Snape
Reply With Quote
  #26  
Old 05-26-2010, 02:58 AM
Flora's Avatar
Flora Flora is offline
Captain Husbando
 
Join Date: June 25, 2008
Location: Cornfields, PA
Age: 25
Posts: 5,849
Pronoun: they
Flora is on a distinguished road
Default Re: Pokemon Brass and Bronze

Quote:
Originally Posted by Grass Pokemon Master View Post
right. all in the next chapter. much more will be revealed.
I...don't think you're getting it.

You should explain it as soon as the confusion pops up, instead of explaining it later. Your job as the writer is to suck people in, to make them interested in your story and to keep them interested. If something confuses a potential reader, and it's not addressed in the story because the next chapter isn't up yet, then you could be driving them away. (unless it's purposely left that way, but since you're just telling us this stuff, it's clear that it's not supposed to be unknown. And plus that technique is only to be used in cases of plot twists and such.)

Plus it's just incredibly sloppy; editing something in is much better than just being like "oh yeah, and i forgot this and this and this" in the next chapter. That could also factor into whether someone would be interested in your story.
__________________
Everyday I'm tumblin'
Eifie is somehow at fault for the usertitle (hint: my boyfriend is Captain Waifu)
Reply With Quote
  #27  
Old 05-27-2010, 06:10 AM
Severus Snape's Avatar
Severus Snape Severus Snape is offline
"Detention, Potter,"
 
Join Date: April 19, 2010
Location: With Metagross in Grass
Age: 19
Posts: 224
Pronoun: Male
Severus Snape is an unknown quantity at this point
Default Re: Pokemon Brass and Bronze

I think I do have to start again. That way, it will give you a better idea (and I'll get my own ORIGINAL characters down.
__________________
Severus Snape
Reply With Quote
Reply

Thread Tools

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off

Forum Jump


All times are GMT. The time now is 10:16 AM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.8
Copyright ©2000 - 2019, vBulletin Solutions, Inc.
Pokémon, Pikachu and all other Pokémon characters © Nintendo, Game Freak and Creatures Inc. The Cave of Dragonflies, content, styles, etc. © Butterfree/Dragonfree/antialiasis.
Forum now hosted by Eevee's HQ.