"If you read mine, I'll read yours!" project - Trial Run

[Lorem Ipsum]

I propose that we start a new system, to help solve inactivity in the forum. So, I’m setting this up as a sort of trial run. Basically, two people get paired together, and they agree to read one of your things (as in a particular story, or a poetry thread; not multiple stories and threads), and actually comment on it. It doesn’t have to be long winded, just a bit of a review that gives an author a heads up on something bad, or congratulates on something good.

So, to enter this, just post here, and give an example of your writing (just an excerpt though!). We can either pair by consecutive posters, or people can offer to pair with another. I don’t mind, but personally I prefer the latter. When two people have agreed to a pairing, they need to go and subscribe to each writing thread that the other wants them to monitor and read.

I’m hoping that this will help get this forum slightly higher activity, and get authors recognition they deserve, or advice they need to help them. So, for me:

Name: Lorem Ipsum
Example of Writing: “He was just about to keep on going, when a flash of green and silver caught his eye. He spun his head around quickly, trying to descry what he had just caught a glimpse of. He veered off to the opposite side of the hunter’s trail, hoping to get a better look. Climbing over a thick tangle of bushes and roots, he came to a relatively spacious area, which had been previously obscured by vegetation. In the very centre of it was a sapling tree, with five twisted fingers of branches coiled around a sword.

The sword was not made by anybody in the surrounding area -- that much Cysagh knew for certain: the blade was far too narrow. He picked it up, and it felt oddly light, as if it wasn’t the heavy piece of metal that he had anticipated. The hilt seemed to fit his hand perfectly, the round, polished emeralds that adorned the hilt not affecting the comfort of it. Cysagh twirled it above his head for a moment, trying to imagine it used in combat.

Satisfied with the last-minute find, he wrapped the blade in the cloth he had used to store his food, and carefully put it into his bag. With that, he walked back onto the trail and exited the forest, content with how the day had gone.” – from Chapter 5 of my in-progress novel, “The Cloud-Capped Towers”.

Please pair with me!

 

[Negrek]

Basically, two people get paired together, and they agree to read everything that the other has produced, and actually comment on it.

Given how much some people on these forums have written, I think it might be better to say that with each post that you can request that one of your stories be read and reviewed. If you want others read as well, then you can create separate posts for people to pair up with; that way, people who have written more don't have to worry about people being scared away because they'd need to review six or something different stories in exchange for getting their only one looked at.

 

[Lorem Ipsum]

Good idea. Edit made.

 

[Medical Meccanica]

Name: Medical Meccanica
Example of Writing: After several hours of begging, Karasu had allowed Daijiro to make one phone call.
"Please", he had said, "I need to talk to my brother". Karasu sighed. He had hoped to capture the future emperor later, but certain circumstances made him kidnap him as a child. In Karasu's visions, Daijiro was a cold-blooded killer who ruled the world with iron claws, but this kid was different than he had expected. Although he was an expert fighter (for his age), he showed little resistance to simply being held against his own will. He was... calm. Nothing like Karasu had seen.

"Fine, skree. You call your brother, then we'll take you back to the cell", Karasu said. If only he knew the oni language better! The tengu dialect was a simple variant of the oni language, but the two had their differences, and that was enough to make Karasu slip up his words. His voice didn't express his intellect well enough.

 

[Charizard Morph]

Why not? I've read at least the first chapter of everything here anyway. And I love reading most anything I can get my hands on.

Name: Charizard Morph

Example of Writing: This is an excerpt from my story: Schooled. Right now there's only one chapter, but i'm almost done with the second one.

Ennio turned to me, smiling. “You, my friend, are a genius. We should take over the school.”

“Yeah, and when we get into trouble for trying we’ll blame it all on Kira, she won’t get into any trouble!” Laughed Scar.

“Of course, then we’ll all raid the principals office and tie him up for ransom. When we get the money I’ll teleport you all outside the grounds and we can all get hit by a car while crossing the street when we want to get sodas from Regies.” Ennio smiled.

“So, your first day here you meet US. Your disaster thing should be going off the charts by now.” Said Sapphire, sitting down on one of the cushions.

“No, actually. I’m not exactly the best at sensing disasters. I’m probably the only Absol alive who has to actually work at it.” I decided not to add the fact that most others who had to actually practice usually ended up accidentally killing themselves.
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I would prefer it if the person who paired with me had a story that was just starting out, only around one to three chapters, and was pokemon. Not that I want to be picky or anything, it's just easier to start with something new, and i feel intrusive reading an origional work. (and pokemon is the only fandom that I regularily follow...)

 

[Lorem Ipsum]

Charizard Morph, I'll pair up with you, if you're happy to do so with me. The excerpt seems interesting.