fugly crap

[Phoenixsong]

I think the problem is that your art is too awesome and have no mistakes that we can crit, so we're left commentless and awesome can only describe so much.

Is why it's awesome so hard, though? :| "I like his eyes", "the shading is nice", "that sounds like a cool idea", "she's my favorite character and you made her look cool"... there are definitely mistakes and it'd be nice if people were willing to help with those, too, but no one likes to be ignored outright just because other people like their stuff. :(

Don't get me wrong, I could step up the commenting myself, although my problem is that I don't do well with comments that don't have criticism and I get the impression that at least a few people here wouldn't care for that. This impression is probably wrong, but... eh.

Thanks, anyway.

A little artistical preview of the literary monstrosity I'll be crapping out starting this Sunday!

Meet Zelos Wilder, a shamus with plenty of swift and who's always dizzy with the dames. He's the cat you call when your leather's been reefed or when you think the ol' frau's a chippy--you're in the King's city and you need a snoop, you just look him up at his office or while he's having a smell from the barrel down at the Lezareno. You could holler for Sgt. Irving, Det. Castagnier and the rest of those clueless elbows at the clubhouse, sure, but there's no bird knows how to get a wire on the hoods like Wilder. It follows that every now and then he gets in a few unfortunate scrapes with some trouble boys and their brunos, but a good clam-baking or a few quick words from his convincer and he's good to dust out. Won't be long before he sees those gunsels put under glass--or else sent home in a wooden kimono--and he's back with your goods.

It's a dangerous lay, full of grifting bearcats wearing iron, wet stiffs and more drilling bean-shooters than you can shake a stick at, but it's what brings in the rhino and hey, the dames always go screwy for a good dick.

Background is crappy because it's just a concept. So no beefin' about it, pipe that? Copacetic.

 

[Ymedron]

Allright, I'll bounce here and give you a critique. : DDD

First of all, his shoulders are good- they look relaxed and are in right proportion (for a small guy) but there is something wrong with his neck; There is no bump on his throat. Males generally have some sort of a bump there, where the adam's apple is. :P

Our left hand is also done well, I don't see any errors there and it looks pleasant. The right hand, in the pocket, however looks a bit contrived- like he had straightened his fingers to the extreme on purpose, you know? Usually when people have their hands relaxed, the fingers (minus the thumb) curl up, and at least in my case the pinky curls the most. :3

The knee seems to be bent to the left in a unnatural way, but then again the foot couldn't be that way if it wasn't.
That position is a bit uncomfortable to be in. I have a slight suspicion you meant to use the pose where the other leg is close to the wall, and confused it with the pose where the person is leaning on the wall with their shoulder or arm, and resting their toes in between the two supportive spots (the other leg and the arm/shoulder.)

I like his expression, though. :3
His jaw seems a bit too soft for a man- usually they are quite angular, especially the part which juts down from below the ear.


That's it for my critique. ;D

 

[Lars The Turtwig]

Here's my serious critique(but it's not long!):

The face is okay, and seems a little drunk, maybe he drinks from his own wine?
Never mind. His eyes are good, and the hands make it appear a little 'sissy', 'gay', or whatever, hiding the fact he is a fighting type and leaning towards the teeter dance, sweet kiss, and all that stuff.
The legs are bad, seriously- they are coloured good, but their proportions suck- you wouldn't catch ANY creature with this body structure and that is-at least to a certain degree- realistic dead in this pose. Sorry if I was too harsh, but that's what I can say. The proportions aren't okay. End of disscusion.

Also: The shading is nice and all that bla bla.

 

[Ymedron]

Hey, actually you CAN.

That creature is a dancing faun.


But anyway, the pose is a bit off-balance- looks like he is going to fall on his back soon. If you want to make the pose balanced, draw a straight line up from the middle of the part where the creature touches the floor (The middle of the hoof in this case) and see if the body is evenly spread on both sides of the line.

 

[jimmyboyacreman]

But anyway, the pose is a bit off-balance- looks like he is going to fall on his back soon. If you want to make the pose balanced, draw a straight line up from the middle of the part where the creature touches the floor (The middle of the hoof in this case) and see if the body is evenly spread on both sides of the line.

I think that emphasizes the drunken appearance, which as far as I can tell is the intention...

 

[Ymedron]

Yeah. :P It also brings to mind the grecian satyrs. I think she referenced them for the character, seeing the dark colors of the legs. (Also, satyrs liked to drink wine and were womanizers. ;D)

A quick fan-art! I tried to do a pose which was more balanced, but I don't know:

*shrug*

 

[jimmyboyacreman]

definitely a lot more balanced - I'm not sure which pose looks better...

satyrs liked to drink wine and were womanizers. ;D

They were also a little odd:

(a satyr balancing a cup on his erection)

 

[Ymedron]

Ancient grecians were shameless people. :P It's funny how people picture things so differently- nowadays satyrs are generally the adult angry versions of fauns, with large horns and hooved feet not much unlike the cliché devil. :P