Mad MOAI
Actually more of a harmour fan
mM's NaNoWriMo - Clarence's Jacket (story's over, possible editing)
Yes, I do have an odd style of writing. I use "maybe," "as if," "almost," and "glanced" too much, among other things. But different styles don't necessarily make bad writing.
So how is my style?
At first, Clarence and his family seem like someone you'd see every day. To tell the truth, they really are nothing but average. Everyone's got school, and a life, and ambition. Other than the sudden disappearance of their mother when Clarence was young, nothing really notable happens in their life. Then one day, an unorthodox article turns up in a newspaper, and the three siblings are turned into birds. And when a heron and a woodpecker show up in their neighborhood, it's the first sign that their comparatively boring lives are starting to get interesting. Anything could be ahead of them: friendships, love, enemies, bullies, adventure, even betrayal...
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-Prologue
The sound of the bell was imminent. Just ten more minutes. Naturally, this was school, and Clarence was stuck in biology class. He definitely didn’t dislike it, though. Biology was his favorite class, and he knew that it would help him into a diving or marine-biologist career when he finished college. But eleventh grade was still a few years away from university. Oh, well – might as well prepare now.
Clarence’s dark brown eyes flicked back down to his notes. He was sixteen, going on seventeen on the ninth of April. To him, he was lucky to have school; it prepared him for what else might happen in life.
Maybe he should look over these before the bell rang. Never know when Mr. Hart might launch a pop quiz at his students and practically explode the whole classroom with surprise.
Clarence stared down at the lined paper, filled with his scrawly handwriting. He was lucky that any of his teachers could read it. He just had to work on not daydreaming about underwater trenches when he was supposed to be studying at a time like this.
All too soon, the drowsy tone echoed in his ears, and he slid the composition book under his arm. Seemingly not in a hurry, Clarence gathered his books-and-such into his arms and lifted himself to his feet before sauntering out the door like any other average student. He heard Mr. Hart say something, but he didn’t scrutinize all of the minuscule details. Sure enough, right as he exited the classroom, another boy came around the corner and fell into step beside him.
Clarence didn’t smile. His brother Rhys was two years younger than him, in the ninth grade. At the ends of the days where Clarence had Biology as his final class, Rhys would appear from around that corner as if out of nowhere. Rhys’s hair was a clean, dark blond and fell over his eyes and glasses, contrasting Clarence’s messier black hair.
“How was it?” Rhys asked his brother with an almost intentionally annoying tone. Had the last class not been his favorite and left him in a good mood, Clarence might have stomped on his brother’s adjacent foot.
“I’m pretty sure we have some sort of test tomorrow,” Clarence answered flatly, focused on his sinister black shoes. “Friday.”
“Sounds good to me,” said Rhys absently. “You like biology.”
Clarence scowled at his shoes and a moment later barely avoided smacking his head into a wall.
“Bad karma,” he muttered, and then told himself, “This way.”
Hoping that he hadn’t looked too incompetent, Clarence turned to follow the hall. About ten seconds later Rhys practically skipped back up behind him after some sort of delay. Probably one of his other ninth grade friends.
“So we pick Ava up in an hour,” Clarence clarified, closely evading a question. Ava was Rhys and his little sister, in the seventh grade. She attended a nearby junior high rather than needlessly following her brothers around through the world of education. “We have some time to kill before that.”
“Check the news?” Rhys suggested. “One of my teachers told me something strange was going on.”
“Did he tell you or the class?” Clarence questioned, almost sarcastically.
“The class, of course,” Rhys said defensively, and seemed hostile for a second.
Clarence said nothing. He took a sudden swerve to the right and shot his hand towards an indent in the wall: his locker. In a few seconds spent rotating the combination lock, the dark silver swung outwards. The inside of Clarence’s locker didn’t seem too unorthodox, apart from the photos of underwater landscapes clasped to the walls by simply magnets. He shoved his black biology composition book roughly into his backpack and tugged the pack carefully out of the locker. After fumbling around with other notebooks and similar items, he shut the locker door, and turned around.
The hall was churning with students, but Rhys had returned to Clarence’s side, backpack at the ready.
“Walking home?” the fourteen-year-old asked amiably, almost naively.
Clarence tossed his head in response and continued down the hallway until he came to a tall door with a large square window a set into it a little lower than eye level. The window revealed the cheerful glow of the sun outside, proving the early-autumn night to be a calm one. He shouldn’t have too much trouble picking up Ava from her school.
The warmth embraced him persistently without warning, and he shuddered it off. He had to get used to it first. Stupid persistent warmth.
“Let’s go,” he murmured, half to himself. The concrete under his shoes was simple and familiar. He trod on it any weekday, anyway.
The curve to their neighborhood crept up under their feet unknowingly. Again, it was the same road they took every day. Nothing very special.
The familiar row of houses slid smoothly by. They were mostly white, gray or brown, tinged with one of several other possible colors which gave the houses variety. They could easily be seen from the windows of the duo’s house.
The steps to the front door approached swiftly. Clarence swung his smoky gray backpack off of his shoulders and nimbly unzipped the smallest front pocket, pulling out a small silver key with a forest green cover on the round end. Secretively, as if the always-watching Rhys might actually be a thief who was memorizing what his brother did so that he could later break into the house, Clarence shadowed his hand with his head and inserted the key into the constantly impatient doorknob. The knob gladly accepted the key into its jagged maw and let it twist, revealing the passage into the unlit house. Clarence stepped in, letting the more comforting, darker environment swallow him and his brother.
When he turned around to lock the door again, he noticed that Rhys was holding a black and white bundle wrapped in clear plastic.
“A newspaper,” said Clarence, and twisted the key in the slot before stuffing it back into its home in his backpack.
“Dad won’t be home for a while,” Clarence told himself. He tapped Rhys (who was glaring daggers intently at the front page of the newly unwrapped newspaper) on the head with his forefinger. “Might as well get something to eat.”
Rhys didn’t answer. He was still standing on the landing just inside the front door, absorbed in what must have been corny news.
Clarence started towards the kitchen but stopped halfway and turned back to his brother. “Something wrong?” he asked, taking a step in the direction of the door.
“Just a meteor-type thing,” Rhys said, apparently not paying attention, but the moment Clarence came within four feet of him his brother shoved the newspaper violently in his face, practically slapping him with the rough, serrated edges. Although somewhat stunned from the thrust, Clarence wrapped his fingers around the sides of the newspaper and rested his eyes on the front article.
“So some unofficial weatherman saw a meteor,” Clarence scoffed, starting to hand the paper back to Rhys. “What’s so special about that?” But Rhys smashed it back into his face… again.
“Read it!” Rhys insisted. “It’s flying low. They said that if it landed, it would pop up in the ground somewhere right around here.”
“Sure,” said Clarence, tenaciously turning his head away and putting his palm over the newspaper. “’They’ could be anyone, even some random bearded guy who lives in a house the size of a trash can. Who knows if the story is even true? You shouldn’t believe everything you read in the newspaper.”
Rhys frowned, but his brother wasn’t watching. Clarence stalked over to the refrigerator and opened the door as if he was forcing himself to be calm. Placidly, but in a dubious manner, he produced an apple from one of the clear drawers and shut the plain white door of the fridge.
About an hour later, he opened the door to the house again, and this time brought inside with him not only Rhys but his twelve-year-old sister Ava. Ava wore glasses like Rhys’s, although her eyesight was in general better and she was more enthusiastic about wearing glasses than he was. The trio of siblings’ father still wasn’t home. Ava settled for a banana as a snack, although Rhys still seemed too ruffled to eat anything. He was shuddering every now and then, although he seemed more excited than scared.
Clarence studied his biology notes silently, perfectly happy to be working towards his looming career in marine biology. Ava was doing her relatively small, seventh-grade-sized load of homework that neither of her brothers would probably get anytime soon.
At around two hours later, at six PM, the low whir of a car engine echoed from just outside the house. Ava dropped her pencil onto the page of her math homework and turned expectantly towards the door. Rhys looked up from the article of the meteor. Clarence finished reading his sentence and stepped back onto the hardwood floor from his tall chair, adjusting his long jacket at the collar. He shook himself to get used to the old, active world rather than the endless ocean of studying and imbibition of his biology notes.
“I’ll go take a shower,” Clarence said quietly to himself, barely loud enough for the others to hear in case they wondered where he was.
Clarence’s room was upstairs. He didn’t mind trudging up and down the staircase all the time, as long as he could have a room to himself, far from the rooms of his younger siblings.
Clarence undressed sluggishly and took his shower, catching snippets of downstairs conversation between his siblings and his father, as well as the low boom that signaled constantly opening and closing doors of a room (or the refrigerator) and maybe the microwave that was always irritatingly loud.
Satisfied, he pulled on some plain casual clothes and the jacket he had just been wearing. The jacket was smooth and black with a white, strap-like Y shape on the back that wrapped around his shoulders and joined in a line that ran down his spine to the vaguely split end of the jacket.
By the time he had slunk back down the stairs, his family was sitting at the dinner table. There was no empty chair where there presumably nonexistent mother would be sitting, but there hadn’t been one for years anyway.
Clarence’s mother had disappeared when he was nine, and when his siblings were younger still. Nobody knew where she had gone; she had just vanished.
“You eating dinner?” Ava called from her seat.
Clarence grunted absently and turned back around. His black-and-white jacket swirled with him as he pivoted, as if in a vortex. “I’ll eat something later,” he told them groggily, and started back upstairs to his bed.
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Studying always made Clarence tired. His eyes weren’t bad, but staring at a paper with dark grey text for an hour straight caused his brain to ache. As he lay sleepless in bed, lacking a shirt, he thought about how much he might make his family worry by not eating, and compared that to how Rhys was undoubtedly devouring Clarence’s food for him. In his mind it was a favor – no use wasting food he wouldn’t eat. Rhys could go ahead and eat it.
He wondered briefly what Ava was eating before the darkness constricted his weary brain, and it sent him hurtling deep into a sleep with unclear dreams of only mist and fog.
Yes, I do have an odd style of writing. I use "maybe," "as if," "almost," and "glanced" too much, among other things. But different styles don't necessarily make bad writing.
So how is my style?
At first, Clarence and his family seem like someone you'd see every day. To tell the truth, they really are nothing but average. Everyone's got school, and a life, and ambition. Other than the sudden disappearance of their mother when Clarence was young, nothing really notable happens in their life. Then one day, an unorthodox article turns up in a newspaper, and the three siblings are turned into birds. And when a heron and a woodpecker show up in their neighborhood, it's the first sign that their comparatively boring lives are starting to get interesting. Anything could be ahead of them: friendships, love, enemies, bullies, adventure, even betrayal...
--
-Prologue
The sound of the bell was imminent. Just ten more minutes. Naturally, this was school, and Clarence was stuck in biology class. He definitely didn’t dislike it, though. Biology was his favorite class, and he knew that it would help him into a diving or marine-biologist career when he finished college. But eleventh grade was still a few years away from university. Oh, well – might as well prepare now.
Clarence’s dark brown eyes flicked back down to his notes. He was sixteen, going on seventeen on the ninth of April. To him, he was lucky to have school; it prepared him for what else might happen in life.
Maybe he should look over these before the bell rang. Never know when Mr. Hart might launch a pop quiz at his students and practically explode the whole classroom with surprise.
Clarence stared down at the lined paper, filled with his scrawly handwriting. He was lucky that any of his teachers could read it. He just had to work on not daydreaming about underwater trenches when he was supposed to be studying at a time like this.
All too soon, the drowsy tone echoed in his ears, and he slid the composition book under his arm. Seemingly not in a hurry, Clarence gathered his books-and-such into his arms and lifted himself to his feet before sauntering out the door like any other average student. He heard Mr. Hart say something, but he didn’t scrutinize all of the minuscule details. Sure enough, right as he exited the classroom, another boy came around the corner and fell into step beside him.
Clarence didn’t smile. His brother Rhys was two years younger than him, in the ninth grade. At the ends of the days where Clarence had Biology as his final class, Rhys would appear from around that corner as if out of nowhere. Rhys’s hair was a clean, dark blond and fell over his eyes and glasses, contrasting Clarence’s messier black hair.
“How was it?” Rhys asked his brother with an almost intentionally annoying tone. Had the last class not been his favorite and left him in a good mood, Clarence might have stomped on his brother’s adjacent foot.
“I’m pretty sure we have some sort of test tomorrow,” Clarence answered flatly, focused on his sinister black shoes. “Friday.”
“Sounds good to me,” said Rhys absently. “You like biology.”
Clarence scowled at his shoes and a moment later barely avoided smacking his head into a wall.
“Bad karma,” he muttered, and then told himself, “This way.”
Hoping that he hadn’t looked too incompetent, Clarence turned to follow the hall. About ten seconds later Rhys practically skipped back up behind him after some sort of delay. Probably one of his other ninth grade friends.
“So we pick Ava up in an hour,” Clarence clarified, closely evading a question. Ava was Rhys and his little sister, in the seventh grade. She attended a nearby junior high rather than needlessly following her brothers around through the world of education. “We have some time to kill before that.”
“Check the news?” Rhys suggested. “One of my teachers told me something strange was going on.”
“Did he tell you or the class?” Clarence questioned, almost sarcastically.
“The class, of course,” Rhys said defensively, and seemed hostile for a second.
Clarence said nothing. He took a sudden swerve to the right and shot his hand towards an indent in the wall: his locker. In a few seconds spent rotating the combination lock, the dark silver swung outwards. The inside of Clarence’s locker didn’t seem too unorthodox, apart from the photos of underwater landscapes clasped to the walls by simply magnets. He shoved his black biology composition book roughly into his backpack and tugged the pack carefully out of the locker. After fumbling around with other notebooks and similar items, he shut the locker door, and turned around.
The hall was churning with students, but Rhys had returned to Clarence’s side, backpack at the ready.
“Walking home?” the fourteen-year-old asked amiably, almost naively.
Clarence tossed his head in response and continued down the hallway until he came to a tall door with a large square window a set into it a little lower than eye level. The window revealed the cheerful glow of the sun outside, proving the early-autumn night to be a calm one. He shouldn’t have too much trouble picking up Ava from her school.
The warmth embraced him persistently without warning, and he shuddered it off. He had to get used to it first. Stupid persistent warmth.
“Let’s go,” he murmured, half to himself. The concrete under his shoes was simple and familiar. He trod on it any weekday, anyway.
The curve to their neighborhood crept up under their feet unknowingly. Again, it was the same road they took every day. Nothing very special.
The familiar row of houses slid smoothly by. They were mostly white, gray or brown, tinged with one of several other possible colors which gave the houses variety. They could easily be seen from the windows of the duo’s house.
The steps to the front door approached swiftly. Clarence swung his smoky gray backpack off of his shoulders and nimbly unzipped the smallest front pocket, pulling out a small silver key with a forest green cover on the round end. Secretively, as if the always-watching Rhys might actually be a thief who was memorizing what his brother did so that he could later break into the house, Clarence shadowed his hand with his head and inserted the key into the constantly impatient doorknob. The knob gladly accepted the key into its jagged maw and let it twist, revealing the passage into the unlit house. Clarence stepped in, letting the more comforting, darker environment swallow him and his brother.
When he turned around to lock the door again, he noticed that Rhys was holding a black and white bundle wrapped in clear plastic.
“A newspaper,” said Clarence, and twisted the key in the slot before stuffing it back into its home in his backpack.
“Dad won’t be home for a while,” Clarence told himself. He tapped Rhys (who was glaring daggers intently at the front page of the newly unwrapped newspaper) on the head with his forefinger. “Might as well get something to eat.”
Rhys didn’t answer. He was still standing on the landing just inside the front door, absorbed in what must have been corny news.
Clarence started towards the kitchen but stopped halfway and turned back to his brother. “Something wrong?” he asked, taking a step in the direction of the door.
“Just a meteor-type thing,” Rhys said, apparently not paying attention, but the moment Clarence came within four feet of him his brother shoved the newspaper violently in his face, practically slapping him with the rough, serrated edges. Although somewhat stunned from the thrust, Clarence wrapped his fingers around the sides of the newspaper and rested his eyes on the front article.
“So some unofficial weatherman saw a meteor,” Clarence scoffed, starting to hand the paper back to Rhys. “What’s so special about that?” But Rhys smashed it back into his face… again.
“Read it!” Rhys insisted. “It’s flying low. They said that if it landed, it would pop up in the ground somewhere right around here.”
“Sure,” said Clarence, tenaciously turning his head away and putting his palm over the newspaper. “’They’ could be anyone, even some random bearded guy who lives in a house the size of a trash can. Who knows if the story is even true? You shouldn’t believe everything you read in the newspaper.”
Rhys frowned, but his brother wasn’t watching. Clarence stalked over to the refrigerator and opened the door as if he was forcing himself to be calm. Placidly, but in a dubious manner, he produced an apple from one of the clear drawers and shut the plain white door of the fridge.
About an hour later, he opened the door to the house again, and this time brought inside with him not only Rhys but his twelve-year-old sister Ava. Ava wore glasses like Rhys’s, although her eyesight was in general better and she was more enthusiastic about wearing glasses than he was. The trio of siblings’ father still wasn’t home. Ava settled for a banana as a snack, although Rhys still seemed too ruffled to eat anything. He was shuddering every now and then, although he seemed more excited than scared.
Clarence studied his biology notes silently, perfectly happy to be working towards his looming career in marine biology. Ava was doing her relatively small, seventh-grade-sized load of homework that neither of her brothers would probably get anytime soon.
At around two hours later, at six PM, the low whir of a car engine echoed from just outside the house. Ava dropped her pencil onto the page of her math homework and turned expectantly towards the door. Rhys looked up from the article of the meteor. Clarence finished reading his sentence and stepped back onto the hardwood floor from his tall chair, adjusting his long jacket at the collar. He shook himself to get used to the old, active world rather than the endless ocean of studying and imbibition of his biology notes.
“I’ll go take a shower,” Clarence said quietly to himself, barely loud enough for the others to hear in case they wondered where he was.
Clarence’s room was upstairs. He didn’t mind trudging up and down the staircase all the time, as long as he could have a room to himself, far from the rooms of his younger siblings.
Clarence undressed sluggishly and took his shower, catching snippets of downstairs conversation between his siblings and his father, as well as the low boom that signaled constantly opening and closing doors of a room (or the refrigerator) and maybe the microwave that was always irritatingly loud.
Satisfied, he pulled on some plain casual clothes and the jacket he had just been wearing. The jacket was smooth and black with a white, strap-like Y shape on the back that wrapped around his shoulders and joined in a line that ran down his spine to the vaguely split end of the jacket.
By the time he had slunk back down the stairs, his family was sitting at the dinner table. There was no empty chair where there presumably nonexistent mother would be sitting, but there hadn’t been one for years anyway.
Clarence’s mother had disappeared when he was nine, and when his siblings were younger still. Nobody knew where she had gone; she had just vanished.
“You eating dinner?” Ava called from her seat.
Clarence grunted absently and turned back around. His black-and-white jacket swirled with him as he pivoted, as if in a vortex. “I’ll eat something later,” he told them groggily, and started back upstairs to his bed.
--
Studying always made Clarence tired. His eyes weren’t bad, but staring at a paper with dark grey text for an hour straight caused his brain to ache. As he lay sleepless in bed, lacking a shirt, he thought about how much he might make his family worry by not eating, and compared that to how Rhys was undoubtedly devouring Clarence’s food for him. In his mind it was a favor – no use wasting food he wouldn’t eat. Rhys could go ahead and eat it.
He wondered briefly what Ava was eating before the darkness constricted his weary brain, and it sent him hurtling deep into a sleep with unclear dreams of only mist and fog.
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