Two Helpful Links

[Keta]

Telescopic text. Click the words, and you'll see. Basically, I found this a very good example on how to improve a simple action to a detailed paragraph.

Writerisms and other sins. Examples of overused bits of writing.

 

[octobr]

The first one I don't think should really be trusted. It's a really good concept but not executed well; it does show that you can describe nearly anything, but I can also see how it might be misleading so people think they should overdescribe things that don't need to be focused on.


The second link is similar. Good concept, but it gives the impression that you should never use the word 'was' or 'said.' Which is, well, a lie.

Besides, it's kind of tl;dr. And pushy. And ... boring.


So these are good and cool but people who are reading these remember to take them in small amounts! As guidelines, not rules.

 

[#1 bro]

Verne kind of said it. :|

The first one's kind of cool, but then again, it's not all that well-written and also "I made tea" is totally acceptable unless you want to bore your readers to death. The second one is too confusing, a bit annoying, and kind of boring. But yeah, like Verne said, they're both fine in small amounts, I guess. :0

 

[OrangeAipom]

Some parts of the telescopic text doesn't make sense. Instead of getting some information about "I", it gave me stuff about walking into the kitchen. O_o Also, some of the words in it aren't needed.

The second one doesn't mention said at all. What are you talking about?

 

[Empoleon]

The seconds links suggestions could be used in moderation. A better option would be checking out a book from your library called "101 Rules of Writing", which is very good. (The 102nd being "break the rules as you see fit").

 

[Eevee]

that first one is like watching falthor write in realtime

 

[OrangeAipom]

Oh yeah, Falthor. I think I remember him.

I wish there was a way to go backwards.