Tell me who that is and I'll answer you.
And as for critique, the only prominent thing I noticed was the way you use adverbs. You use lots of them, and that's not a bad thing, but I'd change the way you use them a bit. It's especially prominent in the last paragraph.
"Cautiously, the girl stood once more. Warily, she put the knife back. She took a deep breath. Silently, she lay back down on the floor, gazing at the ceiling. Never."
I would probably write that more like:
"Cautiously, the girl stood once more. She put the knife back warily and took a deep breath. Without a sound, she lay back down on the floor, gazing at the ceiling. Never."
Other than that little tidbit, however, it's very good. Your writing style actually reminds me a lot of some of my favorite authors.
And as for critique, the only prominent thing I noticed was the way you use adverbs. You use lots of them, and that's not a bad thing, but I'd change the way you use them a bit. It's especially prominent in the last paragraph.
"Cautiously, the girl stood once more. Warily, she put the knife back. She took a deep breath. Silently, she lay back down on the floor, gazing at the ceiling. Never."
I would probably write that more like:
"Cautiously, the girl stood once more. She put the knife back warily and took a deep breath. Without a sound, she lay back down on the floor, gazing at the ceiling. Never."
Other than that little tidbit, however, it's very good. Your writing style actually reminds me a lot of some of my favorite authors.