Arylett Dawnsborough
Your battle description is, for the most part, decent. The first action was rather strange, though, with Sparky firing off a thunderbolt, then Hetagon starting to "very slowly" convert while the attack was in midair, but managing to finish before the electric attack actually struck. Thunderbolts hardly travel slowly, making this sequence improbable.
If Hetagon is still converted to the ground-type, it should be noted in the final status report.
Your health scores are pretty good, with the exception of fire punch, which probably should be doing only 2-3% damage in the rain from a baby non-fire-type. However, your energy--or more specifically, Sparky's energy--makes no sense. Thunderbolt is the most powerful attack he uses, but it's nevertheless the one that costs the least energy. Granted, it is a STAB move, but I should think that would only put it on a level with one of the elemental punches, not below it. Fire punch also cost significantly more than ice punch, which I'm guessing was due to the rain. While this makes some sense, Sparky's energy runs high overall and, when you consider that the 140-bp facade took less energy to execute than fire punch, it doesn't make much sense.
This application is very close. About all that's holding you back is illogical energy scores, primarily for Sparky. The first action's progression didn't make much sense either, but these are relatively minor mistakes. Not Approved for now, but you're well on your way.
Seritinajii
Your description isn't too bad. At times, mistakes make things entirely confused (as in "
Finally, Sparky, even angrier than ever at Sparky's protective nature of his moves, prepares a Fire Punch as he steps back from Hetagon."), but for the most part you do describe well enough when the grammar all goes your way. A bit more care in rereading your reffings before posting them would probably help fix this problem. Your description of facade, though, was very vague.
Has the rain ended at the end of this round or not? Also, while I can kind of understand why rain might lower the energy cost for an attack like ice punch, I'm totally at a loss as to why you did the same for thunderbolt. Also, if Hetagon is still ground-type at the end of the round, it should be noted in the status report.
Hetagon appears to have taken 5% damage from the fire punch, but that's the amount I would have expected to see it take without the rain cutting the attack's power. At the same time, facade only did 9% damage, which is a bit less than it ought to be if you were reffing it at 140 base power--or more than it should be if you were reffing it at 70. I also have no idea what happened to Sparky's energy. It increased between actions two and three, if I'm reading your notes correctly.
Your health and energy are what are causing you the most problems at this point; your battle description is overall okay enough to probably get you approved. It was a lot of small things that led to your rejection on this mock, so if you tighten things up a bit, you should be good. Not Approved
In the future, anyone who submits a mock reffing for a round that has already been graded will be ignored.
Your battle description is, for the most part, decent. The first action was rather strange, though, with Sparky firing off a thunderbolt, then Hetagon starting to "very slowly" convert while the attack was in midair, but managing to finish before the electric attack actually struck. Thunderbolts hardly travel slowly, making this sequence improbable.
If Hetagon is still converted to the ground-type, it should be noted in the final status report.
Your health scores are pretty good, with the exception of fire punch, which probably should be doing only 2-3% damage in the rain from a baby non-fire-type. However, your energy--or more specifically, Sparky's energy--makes no sense. Thunderbolt is the most powerful attack he uses, but it's nevertheless the one that costs the least energy. Granted, it is a STAB move, but I should think that would only put it on a level with one of the elemental punches, not below it. Fire punch also cost significantly more than ice punch, which I'm guessing was due to the rain. While this makes some sense, Sparky's energy runs high overall and, when you consider that the 140-bp facade took less energy to execute than fire punch, it doesn't make much sense.
This application is very close. About all that's holding you back is illogical energy scores, primarily for Sparky. The first action's progression didn't make much sense either, but these are relatively minor mistakes. Not Approved for now, but you're well on your way.
Seritinajii
Your description isn't too bad. At times, mistakes make things entirely confused (as in "
Finally, Sparky, even angrier than ever at Sparky's protective nature of his moves, prepares a Fire Punch as he steps back from Hetagon."), but for the most part you do describe well enough when the grammar all goes your way. A bit more care in rereading your reffings before posting them would probably help fix this problem. Your description of facade, though, was very vague.
Has the rain ended at the end of this round or not? Also, while I can kind of understand why rain might lower the energy cost for an attack like ice punch, I'm totally at a loss as to why you did the same for thunderbolt. Also, if Hetagon is still ground-type at the end of the round, it should be noted in the status report.
Hetagon appears to have taken 5% damage from the fire punch, but that's the amount I would have expected to see it take without the rain cutting the attack's power. At the same time, facade only did 9% damage, which is a bit less than it ought to be if you were reffing it at 140 base power--or more than it should be if you were reffing it at 70. I also have no idea what happened to Sparky's energy. It increased between actions two and three, if I'm reading your notes correctly.
Your health and energy are what are causing you the most problems at this point; your battle description is overall okay enough to probably get you approved. It was a lot of small things that led to your rejection on this mock, so if you tighten things up a bit, you should be good. Not Approved
In the future, anyone who submits a mock reffing for a round that has already been graded will be ignored.
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