Negrek's away at the moment, remember. I can offer you my critique, though.
Firstly, the random line breaks are extremely distracting, and you would do well to do away with them.
Secondly, your grammar throughout seems somewhat stilted and awkward. It's difficult to read, really. A good-bad example would be "Castform rushes to maintain its number one place in this match as it thinks, and hits Allatar, not terribly hard but with boosted power as it's boosted due to Hail weather, with Blizzard. Castform uses it twice more, and misses its opportunity to freeze Allatar."
Thirdly, I can't be bothered to figure out your damage-energy totals, but there are major problems with the way you use attacks. You seem to have grouped all of each Pokémon's attacks into one big lump, which isn't how it works - Pokémon alternate attacks. There are also general problems with the numbers, such as the three Blizzards seemingly adding up to 44% damage, which doesn't work. And that much damage would take more than 9% energy.
Not approved. I'd recommend you familiarise yourself more with the ASB before trying again, and maybe work on your writing.
Though I'm not the final word on it, of course.
Firstly, the random line breaks are extremely distracting, and you would do well to do away with them.
Secondly, your grammar throughout seems somewhat stilted and awkward. It's difficult to read, really. A good-bad example would be "Castform rushes to maintain its number one place in this match as it thinks, and hits Allatar, not terribly hard but with boosted power as it's boosted due to Hail weather, with Blizzard. Castform uses it twice more, and misses its opportunity to freeze Allatar."
Thirdly, I can't be bothered to figure out your damage-energy totals, but there are major problems with the way you use attacks. You seem to have grouped all of each Pokémon's attacks into one big lump, which isn't how it works - Pokémon alternate attacks. There are also general problems with the numbers, such as the three Blizzards seemingly adding up to 44% damage, which doesn't work. And that much damage would take more than 9% energy.
Not approved. I'd recommend you familiarise yourself more with the ASB before trying again, and maybe work on your writing.
Though I'm not the final word on it, of course.