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Kratos Aurion
How does wyrmal's aftermath work? It is obvious enough in ventorm's case, but wyrmal... is just a little worm thing. Their level-up movepools don't really have enough overlap for my taste; I'm a bit iffy on eruption/water spout, their being so rare, but moreso water spout, given ventorm's need to conserve water.
(...you do realize this means we'd have a "wyrmarble" and a "wyrmal" in two totally unrelated families? D:)
Magikarp
First of all, kindly be a bit more careful with the formatting and proofreading--that's readable, but it looks scattered and you've got what looks like a few spelling errors here (or is "fyre" intentional? If so, why? No modern pokédex description author would use an antiquated spelling like that). Maybe actually separate the TM list, at the very least, into a column with only one TM per line. It would be a little nicer if you did.
Second, "small orange cat" or what have you is nowhere near enough description to go on for a pokémon, especially if you're not going to provide any sort of image. Metronome and fling users typically need to be bipedal with hands, for example--are these bipedal or not? Does lewfer look scary, or is it otherwise easily perceived as threatening in any way? I know that pokémon like shinx and staravia don't exactly inspire fear, but shinx, at the very least, is still a snarly little lion. "Large orange fluffy cat" does not sound remotely scary, and therefore I don't know why intimidate would be logical as an ability. Blaze kick sounds iffy, eruption sounds iffy... pluck is a definite no, as that explicitly requires a beak. Or do these have beaks? You didn't say. I can't really tell whether any of the moves you've listed besides the basic "spit fire" attacks and the "everything learns these" attacks are actually logical or fitting, all because you've given me so little to go on.
Why would urban pokémon be anywhere near volcanoes? I guess that's probably one of the least of your problems, but it's still a niggling little inconsistency and I would advise either changing that line or making them mountain pokémon instead of urban.
Both pokémon have too many level-up moves; at this point in time, the maximum number of moves for a basic pokémon is eight, and the max for a first evolution is ten. Trim the level list down.
Your biggest problem here is that your description can't be that sparse. Flesh it out, preferably draw a picture or find someone to draw a picture for you while you're at it, and then come back so I can see how logical some of those moves really are for these things.
Oh, Negrek, I have a question involving Tormutle
If I do a clear enough explanation in the dex entry for its final evolution as to why it loses the Dark type and gains the Psychic type, along with maybe changing the way it evolves to help further explain it, would that work? Otherwise, I need to COMPLETELY redo the final evolution, as it was designed as a Psychic type - attacks, appearance, and all
Um... you've put TM87 Swagger as TM97 Swagger in the First Post.
So, we can submit Pokémon to be checked before we have two battles?
Is it okay if I bump this? My submission seems to have been overlooked.