BETCHA THOUGHT I DIED or broke my hands HUH. No, I've just been really lazy about commenting and stuff. But if you guys want I'll show up more often.
Anyway, I'll critique everything on this page and then post my own shit. I expect a retribution <3
Alright, firstly: I really like how you drew that hand opening the eye. It's a sweet angle, and although the hand's a bit chubby and big compared to the dead boy's head I do commend you because I can't draw angles like that myself!
I was going to say I didn't really get what was going on in the fourth panel, but he's closing the dead boy's mouth, right? It might look better if you hadn't drawn him with his fist closed, because it kind of looks like the dead boy's being punched in the throat very softly for some creepy reason. It might've looked more gentle to close his mouth with an open palm.
Re bent knees: at least you don't draw the legs bent at the pelvis, like some people have the strange habit of doing. They pose would look pretty good if you didn't draw his right foot flat on the ground like that because try it: it's uncomfortable as hell and even a bit painful. One would usually support one's weight on the bent toes.
Other than that, the wrinkles on the hands make them look a little like 30+ hands instead of teens. Even though teenagers do have wrinkly hands, an artist once said that 'a wrinkle adds a year', so you might try adding slight indications of veins or knuckles instead? Might help with the chubbiness problem too, unless they're supposed to be fat. In which case, disregard most of this critique :v
Mitadake High: Page 19
Mitadake High: Page 20
I quite like the poses and expressions on this page and you're visibly improving anatomy-wise, but be careful: your characters are all looking very much like grown men, including the girl. I'm not ace at teenagers or girls myself, but drastically reduce the width of the shoulders (shoulder-pads are so 80s, a half-face (vertically) should do) and make them aligned with the hips instead of larger, unless they're all working out between pages.
For the girls: don't make the shoulder wider than the hips on women in general. Though it's less pronounced on teenaged girls, there should still be a hint of hourglass figure. The neck needs to be slimmer too, because although girls have pretty much the same neck width as boys in real life (men and women are another story), you do need to change things in drawings. It'd help to make the hands more elegant and thin on girls as well but if you have a hard enough time drawing hands as it is don't bother.
Interesting plot development!
Good action in page twenty, and nice use of action lines. Boy with dark glasses' hand seems to be attached backwards though, and dull edges on hatchet plus hard angle make it look like a mallet. Some action lines
on the hatchet in the next-to-last panel would've been nice to really hammer in the fact that Zero's just been stabbed deeply in the shoulder.
Nasty cut too, pretty sure his tendon's through. Say goodbye to your arm, man, my dad had that happen to the back of his legs with pieces of car and he can't run anymore.
Oh dear. What did Linoone do.
Linoone made a sweet .gif that's what.
Like someone said, it doesn't quite loop in the middle, but I love the clean lines, colouring and the facial expression. Good on you for animating the leek as well, most people would've made it stiff as hell when leeks are bendy.
So cute! I really do like the pose, and I don't have much to say except that the colours are a little washed out. Have you tried playing with the scanner settings some?
Hahaha I want to hug him in real life though ;w;
Old, bad eyes
A bit of experimenting. This character is supposed to be a girl, but very so much lacking the figure. I was aiming for some gender neutrality. A type of person who you think they're one gender, but there's that feeling that you're not entirely sure. What do you guys think?
HARUMPH
Kitty kitty. Gonna be messing with the design of this one for ages.
The person in the first drawing's expression is good, though the eyes are a bit too far apart. They should be around one eye away from each other.
Although the second drawing's supposed to represent a (albeit gender-neutral) female, I don't really see it. My mind just immediately went 'male', and not just because I think of men all the time :v I think some very slight bumps on the chest or a vague showing of hips might help with the 'girl' side without stressing it. The way you drew the crotch also kind of hints towards a bulge, and that's very much man-territory, so try making it a straight horizontal line next time or something. I often see people drawing crotches like this and unless your character is wearing skin-tight lycra it just doesn't happen, and unless you're drawing a porny scene you don't want clothes to perfectly mold the genitals (not the case here, rest assured, but it often accidentally happens).
Oh, I do like this. The pose, the shading and the expression are all very nice, and it's an overall super picture. Except for the head maybe being a bit forward, I have nothing to say about this except 'very well done!'
Is she a nomad or other desert-wanderer? Those clothes seem appropriate.
I never draw animal-anthros so I can't vouch for this, but isn't the head a bit small compared to the legs? The neck also seems very long and her right eye (our left) seems to be wrapping around the skull, which eyes don't really do. They tend to bulge out a bit. Pose looks a bit forced as well but otherwise nice job.
Oh yes, I remember this! Even though I don't really like anime I think this came out very well, is it your own creation or a copy of a screenshot or drawing? Is the cigarette supposed to be completely white (looks a bit joint-y :v) or are you going to colour it in? Same applied to the mouth, though I usually don't colour it in myself because I'm a bum.
Why does everything remind me of David Tennant goddamnit
AND NOW FOR MY OWN STUFF. NOT ALL OF IT OR I'D KILL THE THREAD but er what I drew these last few days.
Little .gif I animated with someone else's drawing of Goebbels. This is the latest thing I did and seeing as it's my second animation I think it looks rather nice.
I've been on a huge Gilbert and George kick too (don't know who they are? Shame on you, go look them up right now) since I bought their book yesterday, so I drew a couple of pictures of them.
Young G&G, drawing of a photo of them taken in 1969. They met in 1967 so they've been together for over fourty years! I find that intensely adorable. In this photo, they had the initials G and G drawn on their foreheads, with pictures of each other between the letters. Teehee.
G&G kissing, because I found that photo too cute not to draw.
Just them standing around. Drawn on the train back from Rotterdam.
A guy I drew on the train. Which is why he's even more crooked than my usual drawings.
Ivan and Alain when they wre about fifteen, back in '91, with some Depeche Mode lyrics from the song In Sympathy. Loving Ivan's duds. The buttons he has on are the old Russian flag from '54 to '91 and the current one, instated in '91.
Cover for the comic that will come after TFSoL. The story's a fiercely guarded secret but it'll be delightfully shocking and weird (but not in a pervy way), hopefully.
Thread doesn't have enough gay kissies. Notice how I need a ton of practice because my kisses suck. Not in a good way.
And a pop art picture of Andy Warhol's Blow Job. And no, it's not porny and it's pretty safe for work.
