Li'l Dwagie
As before, your battle description is great, aside from some grammatical issues. There's nothing really persistent or distracting about them, but at times you choose to word things in odd ways ("large chunks of debris sharding from their base", for example;"shard" isn't a verb). As an aside, you tend to use semicolons incorrectly: they're used either to join two complete sentences or to clarify complex lists. Because "splitting herself into two forms" isn't a sentence, you should have a comma instead of a semicolon in "Cringing and crying out, she begins to quiver violently; splitting herself into two forms." You also change tenses quite a bit. However, grammatical and punctuational problems don't make the description overly difficulty to understand.
1. Bayleef looks slow, but it isn't really. Unless a pokémon is paralyzed or has very low natural speed, it will produce more than one clone with double team. Unless otherwise specified, a pokémon will produce the maximum number of clones it can with a double team, and in the case of bayleef that would be between three and five.
Clones disappear when their creator is successfully struck by a damaging attack, so Thyme's should have vanished after she took the rapid spin.
Edit: Posted before I was done with this; will have paychecks and new mock up in a few minutes.
2. Why did the rock slide remove Chanson's stat boosts? I could see something like speed going down, as she would probably have some trouble moving after getting hit by the rocks, or even attack, but defense?
3. Rapid spin might not dispell the mist entirely, but it would at least go to some length to break it up. The spinning is going to get the air moving, so the effect would be similar to that of putting a fan in a misty room: it might not get rid of the mist immediately, but it will break it up a bit.
4. We don't use "turns" in ASB: time is measured in either actions or rounds. I'm guessing you meant that the mist will last for two more actions, but you should specify that.
Health and energy calculations look just fine. It's really just the logic of ASB (and some of its more esoteric knowledge) that you haven't got down. I'm willing to Approve you at novice level if you'll take it; otherwise, the elite mock has been rolled over.
Paychecks
Chiropter: 1 = $12
Kindling Queen: 1 = $3
Kratos Aurion: 1 2 3 4 5 + 1 = $62
moon-panther: 1 + 1 2 = $13
Negrek: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 = $130
Prettzel: 1 2 3 = $24
StyliBoy: 1 = $3
As before, your battle description is great, aside from some grammatical issues. There's nothing really persistent or distracting about them, but at times you choose to word things in odd ways ("large chunks of debris sharding from their base", for example;"shard" isn't a verb). As an aside, you tend to use semicolons incorrectly: they're used either to join two complete sentences or to clarify complex lists. Because "splitting herself into two forms" isn't a sentence, you should have a comma instead of a semicolon in "Cringing and crying out, she begins to quiver violently; splitting herself into two forms." You also change tenses quite a bit. However, grammatical and punctuational problems don't make the description overly difficulty to understand.
1. Bayleef looks slow, but it isn't really. Unless a pokémon is paralyzed or has very low natural speed, it will produce more than one clone with double team. Unless otherwise specified, a pokémon will produce the maximum number of clones it can with a double team, and in the case of bayleef that would be between three and five.
Clones disappear when their creator is successfully struck by a damaging attack, so Thyme's should have vanished after she took the rapid spin.
Edit: Posted before I was done with this; will have paychecks and new mock up in a few minutes.
2. Why did the rock slide remove Chanson's stat boosts? I could see something like speed going down, as she would probably have some trouble moving after getting hit by the rocks, or even attack, but defense?
3. Rapid spin might not dispell the mist entirely, but it would at least go to some length to break it up. The spinning is going to get the air moving, so the effect would be similar to that of putting a fan in a misty room: it might not get rid of the mist immediately, but it will break it up a bit.
4. We don't use "turns" in ASB: time is measured in either actions or rounds. I'm guessing you meant that the mist will last for two more actions, but you should specify that.
Health and energy calculations look just fine. It's really just the logic of ASB (and some of its more esoteric knowledge) that you haven't got down. I'm willing to Approve you at novice level if you'll take it; otherwise, the elite mock has been rolled over.
Paychecks
Chiropter: 1 = $12
Kindling Queen: 1 = $3
Kratos Aurion: 1 2 3 4 5 + 1 = $62
moon-panther: 1 + 1 2 = $13
Negrek: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 = $130
Prettzel: 1 2 3 = $24
StyliBoy: 1 = $3
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